Saturday, March 16, 2013

Empty Pews and Empty Faces


Empty pews and empty faces
Fastened blankly on the floor.
Do they sit and seek a savior,
Or are they edging toward the door?


Hands held clasped closely together,
For the penitent portrayal
But the 'twined fingers are twisted
A benediction of betrayal.

Do not stand and sign surrender,
And sing false songs of sanctity,
When your heartbeat holds no honor
And mocks your Maker's divinity.


Don't you know the Devil's purpose
In the distractions that demand
Every ounce of your attention
And the dereliction of your hands?

Can't you hear now, heaven's heartbeat?
Don't you feel the Father's call?
Or is numbness all you know now
Leaning limply toward your fall?

These well-stocked pews and worn out spaces...
Is the spirit willing, but flesh too weak?
Remember the gift of your Redemption
Seize the moment, dare to speak.

Friends, this world has wounds of trouble;
As Tribulation's time draws near.
The loveless languish out there, lonely,
Fraught with agony and fear.

Now, if  you find your pew is empty
And your face turned toward the door,
Quickly claim your Lord's compassion
And remember when you, too, were once quite poor.

So now kneel, my friends, in wonder
Though your shameful past is plain,
Empty faces, seek a Savior!
Fill your hearts with love again.

3 comments:

  1. I really like the first 3 verses, awesome word play, but the last verse seems like it belongs on a different poem - it is disjointed somehow and doesn't really seem to belong with the rest of the poem in content or word choice.It is almost like the poem was a warning from God and then becuase it was so "harsh" you added on a last verse to make it easier to swallow but it changes the tone of the poem completly and I think it would stand better either without it or with something different as an ending verse. - Just my opinion :) nice writing regardless!

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  2. That's pretty accurate. I DID add the last stanza because the rest seemed so harsh. I always like to leave what I write with a ray of hope. What I actually think is that there is a lot more missing between the third stanza and the last. . . THanks for the input.

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  3. Then perhaps rewrite the ending as more of a plea to repent and return to their first love so you still have that positive end, but it doesn't negate the warning of the poem itself. Maybe even a verse reminding about WHY they are in church in the first place, just playing....

    This world is full of trouble
    Distractions still abound
    The love of some grow cold
    Let not your soul be bound

    Remember now, the moment
    Your heart first found it's place
    Return to your first love
    And seek your Master's face.

    Thanks for letting me "play" it has been a while since I wrote :)

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